Dash, a crimson rose once troddenUnderneath a foot path worn
Quickly loves first kiss forgotten
For this love though do not mourn
Eyes now open light first seeing
Skies of teal, so heather blue
Turn the page on love now fleeting
Look back not lest you review
Come upon the broken hearted
Coiled up where love once sprung
Bonds that joined now long since parted
Echoes faintly love’s bell rung
Do in time think to remember
Chance perhaps will come along
Soft still glowing loves red ember
Dash a crimson rose love song
by Dennis Tkon Copyright 2006
13 comments:
Glad you went your own way.
I just love your poem. It touched my heart as not many do.
Keep writing my friend.
-bd
that's one sad date ;-)
love the assonance.
lovely rhythm...
thanks for checking out my post - explains why I didn't get a self-date this week :)
Has a quaitness (not in a bad way) the sound of a gentle time long ago.
I love how the beginning comes back in the end but in a different way. Nicely done.
Dennis, just wanted to tell you thanks so much for you comment on my poem. Also love the photo you used.
love,Melanie
Thanks BD, ren.kat, g, wendy, dana and BD (again!). It's great that you ladies take the time to stop by and share your thoughts. I enjoy sharing with you all!
Dennis
A beautiful reflection of love now passed Dennis. The blues and reds come forward and hit you - almost a blood red feel i get from this. fab imagery too.
Natalie – Thanks! This is definitely one of my favorites. Believe it or not, it wasn’t inspired by any one particular woman. Rather, it was more reflective of the mood I was in – I had been feeling rather dashed about in matters of the heart and having a hard time reminding myself that not withstanding whatever happens, the red ember of love burns on, even if only quietly.
Interesting use of sound Dennis. My favorite line: Skies of teal, so heather blue.
Thanks Sam! I really appreciate your comments! And thanks so much for stopping by.
I like the rhythm of this one and the hopefulness that seeps through the sadness of it. Very nice, Dennis!
Robin, You’re so sweet for stopping by and commenting on all my posts! You always have such great things to say too! You hit on two of my most favorite things about this poem – the rhythm and hopefulness. I love poems that are fun to read and make you think. It took me a long time to embrace free-form poetry because nothing rhymed and it was so cerebral. I like it when poetry is fun!!
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